Saturday, July 1, 2017



GREEN LANTERN: IN THE BEGINNING
AN EIGHT-PART MINI-SERIES
PART 1 OF 8


PAGE ONE
SPLASH: ABIN SUR is flying over a rural area on Korugar that’s lit by a large, light-blue moon. A yellow beam coming from the ground level in the distance is striking him, and he’s recoiling from the blast.
CAPTION: On the planet Korugar, Green Lantern Abin Sur is returning to his secluded home when an energy blast strikes him.
Silent panel.


PAGE TWO
PANEL 1: Abin has landed in front of his home and is staggering toward the doorway. The house is one-story and circular, with a flat roof. The windows are circular too.
1. ABIN: Ring, what happened?
2. ABIN’S RING: Analyzing…

PANEL 2: In the living room, Abin has shut the door and collapsed in the floor.
3 ABIN’S RIN: I was unable to protect you because the beam was specifically designed to elude detection by a Power Ring.
4. ABIN: What’s my condition?

PANEL 3: Close on Abin’s head and the ring, which is near his head.
5. ABIN'S RING: It’s terminal. I’ve sent notice to the Central Power Battery. It’ll transport your replacements here for instructions. The battery has already calculated that you’ll get more than one replacement.
6. ABIN (thinking): I have a good idea who did this.

PANEL 4: Taking in the blue moon, which is shining through a window of the room.
7. ABIN: Ring, see to it that my replacements are transported to the front yard, and that they see a hologram of me there delivering the following message.

PANEL 5: A view of the house from the front yard. Abin’s voice is coming from the inside.
8. ABIN: You’re on the planet Korugar, My name is Abin Sur. What you’re seeing is a hologram of me. By the time you see it, I’ll be dead. My body is inside the house. I’ve been assassinated. I was a Green Lantern. Green Lanterns are interplanetary law enforcement officers. You’ve been chosen to replace me.

PANEL 6: In the distance, a small figure can be seen flying toward the house.
Silent panel.


PAGE THREE
PANEL 1: The figure has moved closer in. It’s SINESTRO, and there’s a yellow ring on his left hand. He’s wearing a black uniform.
Silent panel.

PANEL 2: Sinestro is now on Abin’s porch and is opening the door.
Silent panel.

PANEL 3: Sinestro is in the living room and standing over Abin’s body.
Silent panel.

PANEL 4: Sinestro is kneeling beside Abin and removing his Power Ring.
Silent panel.

PANEL 5. In a closer view, Sinestro is still kneeling and is starting to place the green ring on his own
right hand.
Silent panel.

PANEL 6: In a view favoring Abin’s body, Sinestro is standing up. He’s wearing the yellow ring on his left hand and the green ring on his right hand.
Silent panel.


PAGE FOUR
PANEL 1: A view from inside the car as HAL JORDAN is driving a stock car on a track that a big crowd is watching.
1. HAL (thinking): That idiot is coming up too fast under a caution flag.
CAPTION: .As Hal Jordan competes in a season-ending stock car race, one of his rivals is determined to make his dislike of Jordan known.

PANEL 2: The view takes in the car behind Hal’s, as the other driver taps Hal’s bumper and knocks Hal’s car askew.
Silent panel.

PANEL 3. From inside Hal’s car, the other driver can be seen roaring past the enraged Hal.
2. HAL (thinking): Oh, I’ll get you.

PANEL 4: Hal’s car slams into the other car’s side hard.
Silent panel.

PANEL 5: A few from the stands as the crowd is on its feet. A REDNECK FAN with a big belly who is drinking a beer is greatly amused.
3. REDNECK FAN: I bet he won’t mess with Jordan again.

PANEL 6: Tom Kalamku and the rest of Hal’s pit crew are looking toward the wrecked vehicles with dismay. Tom is wearing a patch that reads, “Tom Kamalku, Crew Chief.” Tom looks very young, no more than 20.
4. TOM (thinking): Oh, Hal. Why did you have to hit him back?


PAGE FIVE
PANEL 1: CAROL FERRIS and CARL FERRIS are meeting in his office. Carl is standing behind his desk and Carol is standing in front of it. A nameplate on Carl’s desk identifies him as the Ferris Racing’s CEO. Carol looks harried and Carl looks miffed.
1. CARL: He was court-martialed from the Navy for punching a superior officer and served six months in the brig, but I gave him a second chance by hiring him. I’d give anybody a fifth chance if I really thought he’d changed his ways. But he doesn’t seem capable of that.

PANEL 2: On Carol.
2. CAROL: Dad, he’s one of the best drivers in the world. I’ll talk to him.

PANEL 3: On Carl.
3. CARL: I know exactly how good he is. That’s why I hired him. But I also know that he trusts his impulses too much and doesn’t think enough. Billy Reynolds was clearly at fault there. All Hal had to do was sit back and let him be punished.

PANEL 4: Two-shot on Carl and Carol
4. CAROL: I’m going to talk to him right now.
5. CARL: Good. Tell him I want to see him in my office at 9 AM tomorrow. And not at 9:15, but at 9 sharp.

PANEL 5: Carol is walking toward the door.
6. CAROL: And Carol, try making your talk with him business-oriented instead of personal.

PANEL 6: Carol is holding the doorknob and is looking back at Carl, surprised.
7. CARL: I’m not as out of touch about what goes on here as some people think I am.


PAGE SIX
PANEL 1: In Carol’s office, Carol is sitting behind her desk and leaning back in her chair, and Hal is standing and facing her. A nameplate identifies her as the company’s manager.
1. CAROL: He’s pretty upset, Hal. He wants to see you in his office at 9 in the morning. And please don’t show up even one minute late. You do tend to do that.

PANEL 2: Favoring Hal, who looks glum.
2. HAL: All right, Carol. Is he going to fire me?
3. CAROL: I really don’t know, Hal. But the sanctioning body is going to come down hard on you.

PANEL 3: In the hallway outside, Hal is coming out of Carol’s office. Tom Kamalku, who has been sitting in a chair and waiting for Hal to come out, stands up.
4. TOM: What happened?
5. HAL: Nothing yet. I’ve got a meeting with Carl in the morning.

PANEL 4: Hal and Tom are walking down the hall.
6. TOM: I don’t think he’ll fire you.
7. HAL: I wouldn’t bet on that. He’s never liked me.

PANEL 5: In the Ferris parking lot, Hal has opened his car door and gotten inside. He’s about to close the door.
Silent panel.

PANEL 6: A view through the car’s windshield. Hal has closed the door, and he’s been enveloped by a flash of green.
Silent panel.

PAGE SEVEN
PANEL 1. GUY GARDNER is wearing a suit and standing in front of a crowd in the lobby of a gym. TWO COMPANY EXECUTIVES in suits stand near him, A company logo is visible in the panel that reads, "Gardner’s Gyms." A banner has been strung that has a photo of Guy on the sidelines on a football game, shouting to his teammates and holding his helmet by the facemask. The banner reads, "Grand Opening! Special Appearance by Guy Gardner!"
1. GUY: Hello, everyone.
Caption: At the opening of a new Gardner’s Gym in Miami, former pro football linebacker Guy Gardner is addressing the members.

PANEL 2: A view of the crowd from over Guy’s shoulder. They’ve come dressed to exercise.
2. GUY: Welcome to the opening of our ninety-sixth location. We’ve got everything you could want here, including a nursery, and it’s all state of the art. We’re open 24 hours year-round, and we’ve got enough equipment that you’ll probably never have to wait in line to use any of it.

PANEL 3: Another view, as Guy is gesturing back over his shoulder toward the equipment.
3. GUY: All right, go to it. I’ve already talked to a lot of you, and I’ll be here for a while to answer any
more of your questions.

PANEL 4: The crowd is CHEERING and people are moving past Guy as a YOUNG MAN approaches him with a pad and a pen.
4. YOUNG MAN: Mr. Gardner, I’ve heard that you don’t like signing autographs, but I really want yours and I hope you won’t mind.

PANEL 5: The TWO EXECUTIVES are remaining near Guy as he takes the pad and pen.
5. GUY: I don’t mind it, but it embarrasses me a little. All I did was play a kids game. I didn’t do anything important. I didn’t teach school or put out fires.

PANEL 6: Guy has signed his name and is handing back the pad and pen to the young man as an OLDER MAN steps up.
6. YOUNG: MAN: Thank you.
7. GUY: OK.
8. OLDER MAN: Mr. Gardner, I don’t want to be a wet blanket at your nice event here, but I do need to mention some shady billing practices that your company engages in.


PAGE EIGHT
PANEL 1: Guy is very surprised, and the young man stops to watch the exchange.
1. GUY: What?
2. OLDER MAN: I was a member at the Pembroke Pines location, and I liked the gym a lot. But when I moved to Miami they kept automatically debiting my checking account for three months for my membership fee, even though I kept telling them to stop it. And they still won’t give me a refund.

PANEL 2: Guy is handing the man a business card from his coat pocket and is gesturing with his thumb toward the two executives.
3. GUY: I’m not involved in the management. Those nimrods over there just pay me to use my name. But my private e-mail address is on there. Contact me with your information and I’ll personally refund your money and give you a free one-year membership that’ll be good at any location.

PANEL 3: The man is studying the card carefully as he moves away, and the two executives look miffed.
4. OLDER MAN: Thank you, sir.
5. GUY: Any time. I’m sorry about the problem.

PANEL 4: A very attractive YOUNG WOMAN, who is the last person in line, steps up to Guy, moving and acting flirtatiously. Guy remains businesslike.
6. YOUNG WOMAN: Oh hello, Mr. Gardner. I’m a huge fan of yours.
7: GUY: Hello to you too.

PANEL 5: On the young woman.
8. YOUNG WOMAN: I’m wondering if you’re in the market for a personal assistant. I have a great deal of experience in that area.

PANEL 6: Guy is handing her a business card.
9. GUY: My personal e-mail address is on there. Send me a resume.
10. YOUNG WOMAN: Oh thank you.


PAGE NINE
PANEL 1: The young woman is about to exit through the front door and is looking back at Guy and
smiling.
1. YOUNG WOMAN: It was so nice to meet you, Mr. Gardner.

PANEL 2: The young man who got Guy’s autograph is standing nearby and is impressed.
2. YOUNG MAN: That must be nice.
3. GUY: Her kind hangs out in the lobbies of all the hotels where pro football and basketball teams stay. She wants to "accidentally" get pregnant and then sue me for child support. Later for that.

PANEL 3: Guy turns to the two executives as he starts to move away.
4. GUY: I gotta make a pit stop.

PANEL 4. Guy is moving toward one of the gym’s restrooms, and one of the executives is running after him.
5. FIRST EXECUTIVE: What did you mean, calling us nimrods?
6. GUY: Don’t play weaselly tricks and then hide behind my name.

PANEL 5: Guy has pushed the restroom door partly open.
7. GUY: And I ain’t gonna continue this conversation in here.

PANEL 6: Guy is walking through the empty restroom when a burst of green light envelopes him.
Silent panel.



PAGE TEN
PANEL 1: John Stewart is wearing a police uniform and is standing before the desk of CAPTAIN EDGERTON. Edgerton is standing behind the desk. He’s burly, has a shaved head and is craggy faced.
1; JOHN: Captain, I broke off the pursuit because the guy had a burned-out taillight and he ran from me. I didn’t think it was worth endangering the public over, especially during a rainstorm. 
CAPTION: At a precinct police department in Midway City, Officer John Stewart’s supervisor has called him on the carpet.

PANEL 2: A view from behind Edgerton, giving a good view of John.
2, EDGERTON: That punk will tell all his friends that he ran and the cop didn’t chase him, and pretty soon they’ll all be running from us. Anyway you don’t know who was in that car. It might have been a serial killer.

3. JOHN: Sir, what are the odds of that? Meanwhile, I did know that 28 percent of police chases end in crashes and 15 percent end in injuries. And it was raining.

PANEL 3: Close of Edgerton, who looks annoyed. His name is visible on his chest.
4. EDGERTON: John, there are certain ways that police officers do things. We’re here to put down the bad guys aggressively. Not to be passive and refrain from putting them down. I hope I’m making myself clear about that. 

PANEL 4: Close on John.
5. JOHN: Yes sir, you are.

PANEL 5: A view of Edgerton from over John’s shoulder.
6. EDGERTON: That will be all, John.

PANEL 6: John is leaving Edgerton’s office.
7. EDGERTON: And John, I’m going to give you a week off without pay, starting tomorrow, so you’ll have some time to reconsider your attitude toward law enforcement. And to toughen it.


PAGE ELEVEN
PANEL 1: In the locker room at the police station, John is getting dressed, as is an older white cop named SMITTY.
1. SMITTY: I’ll tell you what his real problem is, John.
2. JOHN: What do you mean?

PANEL 2: Favoring Smitty.
3. SMITTY: It wasn’t so much that you broke off that chase. It’s that he’s not sure he can trust you to honor the code of silence. 

PANEL3: Favoring John, who looks grim.
4. JOHN: Oh.

PANEL 4: Close on Smitty.
5. SMITTY: It’ll be worse if the beat cops get that idea about you. It might have repercussions beyond your job. It could spill over into your personal life too.

PANEL 5: Two shot, John and Smitty.
6. SMITTY: You might want to start sending out resumes before that happens. Just a word to the wise.

PANEL 6: John is walking away, and Smitty is watching him go.
Silent panel.


PAGE TWELVE
PANEL 1: John is walking down a sidewalk in an urban setting. On the other side of the street, SIX BLACK YOUTHS have gathered and are looking at John.
1. FIRST YOUTH (smiling): Hey, I smell bacon.

PANEL 2: John has stopped and is looking at them. They’re all smiling.
2. FIRST YOUTH: Oh, excuse me. It’s Officer Stewart.

PANEL 3: John is glowering at them.
3. JOHN: I bet you won’t come over here alone and say that.
4. FIRST YOUTH: Nah, you might be packing heat.

PANEL 4: John is unlocking the front door of his apartment.
Silent panel.

PANEL 5: John is sitting on the edge of his bed, looking dejected.
3. JOHN (thinking): Maybe I’m just not cut out for this.

PANEL 6: John has buried his face in his hands, and has been enveloped in a green flash.
Silent panel. 


PAGE THIRTEEN
PANEL 1: In a coffee shop, Kyle Rayner is alone at a table looking at his laptop as a FAN approaches him. The fan is about 50, with a graying beard, heavyset and wearing a porkpie hat and a vest.
1. FAN: Excuse me. Aren’t you Kyle Rayner? The comics artist?
2. KYLE (smiling): That’s right. What can I do for you?
CAPTION: Kyle Rayner is taking a break at a coffee shop near his apartment and home studio.

PANEL 2: On the fan, who is scowling.
3. FAN: You can give General Glory back his classic uniform. The redesign you did of it is terrible.

PANEL 3: Favoring Kyle, who is crestfallen.
4. KYLE: Oh. Well, I’m sorry you feel that way about it. Most people seem to like it. The comic is selling a lot better now.
5. FAN: Sales, sales, sales. There’s more to this than just sales. You’ve destroyed something that was a fundamental part of General Glory’s mythos for 78 years.

PANEL 4: Two shot on them.
6. KYLE: Well sir, Gaze Comics asked me to redesign his uniform, and I did that. And the sales are how we tell what people like and don’t like. Since they improved, I probably didn’t screw it up too badly, did I?

PANEL 5: Closeup of the fan.
7. FAN: Who do you think you are? You’re a freshman in college. I’m 29 years older than you are. You haven’t paid your dues. 

PANEL 6: Favoring Kyle.
8, KYLE: All right sir, you’ve had your say. Just move along now and leave me in peace. Or I’ll complain to the management about you.



PAGE FOURTEEN
PANEL 1: The fan is getting worked up now.
1. FAN: Hold on. That’s not all. Your pencilling is utter crap. If you didn’t have Joel Scarpelli inking your pages, everybody could see how bad you are. Joel is the man, and you suck.

PANEL 2: On Kyle, who is glowering.
2. KYLE: You idiot. Why aren’t you playing with your grandchildren now?

PANEL 3: Two shot on Kyle and the fan. Kyle is very angry and has stood up.
3. KYLE: Wait a minute. How did you even know I was here? I bet you’ve been stalking me, haven’t you? Are you really that crazy? I can’t believe this.

PANEL 4: Favoring the fan. 
4. KYLE: Old mossbacks like you are who make the comics industry a joke to so many people.
5. FAN: Be careful, Kyle. Don’t say anything you wouldn’t want the whole world to hear. Look behind you.

PANEL 5: Kyle has turned and seen that a SECOND FAN has been taping the exchange from behind him the whole time.
6. KYLE: Are you telling me that TWO of you idiots have been stalking me?

PANEL 6: On the sidewalk outside, Kyle is walking away from the coffee shop, carrying his briefcase. The two fans are inside, watching him go through the glass. The second fan is still taping him. A sign above the door reads, CAFFBUCK'S.



PAGE FIFTEEN
PANEL 1: Kyle is walking down the hall of his apartment building. Behind him, RADU STANCU has stepped out of a doorway and is calling to him.
1. RADU: Kyle. your rent was due yesterday.
2. KYLE: I’ll write you a check tomorrow, Radu.

PANEL 2: Kyle is closing his front door.
3. RADU: What’s wrong with right now?

PANEL 3: In the living room of ROBERT ZIV. He’s talking on his cell phone.
1. KYLE’S VOICE (coming from Ziv’s phone): Robert, I want to ink my own pencils in this issue.
CAPTION: Robert Ziv, Kyle’s editor at Pinnacle Comics, is surprised to be receiving a phone call from Kyle at night. 

PANEL 4: Closer on Robert, who looks perplexed now.
ROBERT: What’s wrong with Joel Scarpelli’s inking?
KYLE’S VOICE (coming from Robert’s phone): Nothing. It’s great. I just want to ink my own pencils for this issue.

PANEL 5: In Kyle’s studio, a green flash envelopes him.
ROBERT’S VOICE (coming from Kyle’s phone): Come on. How are you going to do that and make your deadlines, Kyle?

PANEL 6: On Kyle’s phone, which is lying on the floor.
ROBERT’S VOICE (coming from the phone): Kyle? Are you still there?


PAGE SIXTEEN
PANEL 1: Kyle has materialized in Abin Sur’s front yard in a burst of green light. He’s wearing a GLC uniform. Hal, Guy and John are already there, also in uniforms. All four are wearing Power Rings and holding Power Batteries. A hologram of Abin Sur is standing before them. It’s still night on Korugar.
1. KYLE: What’s happening?

PANEL 2: Abin’s hologram begins to speak.
2. ABIN: You’re on the planet Korugar. My name is Abin Sur. What you’re seeing is a hologram of me. By the time you see it, I’ll be dead. My body is inside the house. I’ve been assassinated. I was a Green Lantern. Green Lanterns are interplanetary law enforcement officers. Those who are hearing this been chosen to replace me.

PANEL 3: The four new Lanterns are looking at each other, incredulous.
Silent panel.

PANEL 4: Another angle.
3. ABIN: The rings you’re wearing have all the capabilities of a star-ship, right on your finger. They’re powered by the batteries you’re holding. You can control them with your thoughts, or, when the instructions are complex, you can give them verbal orders. When you’re ready to learn how to use them, just say to your rings, I’m ready for my instructions.

PANEL 5: Another angle.
4. ABIN: You were chosen by an extraordinary artifact on the planet Oa that’s called the Central Power Battery. Its primary purpose is law enforcement on planets that have crossed the nuclear threshold. However, it also acts to stop interstellar aggression and the extinction of sentient species.

PANEL 6: Another angle.
5. ABIN: You might think you’re ill-suited to work in this sort of law enforcement. I certainly did. The reasons that the Central Power Battery chooses particular beings to serve as Green Lanterns are beyond understanding. They’re usually to some extent or other misfits on their worlds, but the Central Power Battery never makes mistakes in these choices.


PAGE SEVENTEEN
PANEL 1: On Abin’s hologram.
1. ABIN: My body is in the front room of the house. You’ll find my Power Ring on my finger and my
Power Battery in a gray cabinet. Tell them to return home, and they’ll do so.

PANEL 2. Close-up of Abin.
2. ABIN: Your first task as Green Lanterns will be to find who murdered me. I was struck by a
strange yellow beam as I flew toward my house. It was specifically designed to avoid detection by my ring. Power Rings are programmed to automatically protect the wearer against mortal injury.

PANEL 3: Taking in all of them.
3. ABIN: I don’t know for a fact who did this to me, but I do have a suspicion.

PANEL 4: The hologram is fading.
4. ABIN: Ah… ah… ah...

PANEL 5. The hologram has vanished, and the four new Green Lanterns are looking as each other.
5. HAL: Well, I guess that’s it. Let’s go inside.

PANEL 6: The Lanterns begin to walk toward the front door.
Silent panel.


PAGE EIGHTEEN
PANEL 1: They come into the living room and see Abin’s body on the floor.
Silent panel.

PANEL 2: They’re now standing close to the body.
1. JOHN: The poor guy.
2. HAL: He’s not wearing a ring.

PANEL 3: Favoring Kyle.
3. KYLE: Let me try something. Ring, what happened to Abin Sur’s Power Ring?

PANEL 4: Favoring Kyle’s ring.
4. KYLE’S RING: Unable to determine.

PANEL 5: Favoring John.
4. JOHN: Ring, who killed Abin Sur?
5. JOHN’S RING: Unable to determine.

PANEL 6: Favoring Hal.
6. HAL: Ring, what should we do next?
7. HAL’S RING: Unable to give such advice.


PAGE NINETEEN
PANEL 1: Guy has opened the gray cabinet, which is empty.
1. GUY: There’s nothing in here. You know, whoever killed him might still be around here, and he might not be friendly toward us either.

PANEL 2: Four-shot.
2. KYLE: And if they could kill this Abin Sur, who was experienced, we’d stand no chance against them.

PANEL 3: Another four-shot.
4. GUY: Maybe whoever killed him took his ring and his battery.
5. HAL: I bet that’s what happened.

PANEL 4: Favoring John.
6. JOHN: We’d better get the rest of those instructions now.

PANEL 5. Favoring Hal.
7. HAL: Someone is on the porch.

PANEL 6: The four of them have turned to look toward the front door, which is opening. A darkened
figure is standing in the portal.
8. JOHN: Ring, protect us.



PAGE TWENTY
SPLASH: The figure has stepped into the room, and is revealed as Sinestro. He’s now wearing a GLC uniform. The green ring is visible on his right hand, but no yellow ring can be seen on his left hand.
1. SINESTRO: My name is Sinestro Natu. I’ve come to help you.

CAPTION: To be continued...

Saturday, April 1, 2017



GREEN LANTERN: EMERALD KNIGHT #1  
THE RAVENING PIT, PART 1 OF 4


PAGE ONE
The scene is an indoor amphitheater about 75 feet in diameter, the kind used in medical schools. The view is over the shoulders of two men who are looking down on the stage. The men are HECTOR HAMMOND and a scientist in a white coat named AARON GOINS. Hammond looks normal, like he did in his first appearance in the Silver Age. He’s wearing a suit. Goins is an older man, with gray hair, and is somewhat bent. 

On the stage, which is better lit than the surrounding seats, stand TWO HUMANOIDS who look the way the Shark did in the Silver Age -- recognizably sharklike, rather than the monstrous way he’s been depicted in his recent appearances. They’re operating separate control panels of a device that’s modeled after a hyperbaric chamber. 

Inside the chamber, submerged in a SLIGHTLY REDDISH liquid, floats another sharklike creature, this one less far along in the process of morphing into humanoid form. Its arms and legs are only partly erupted, and its head is still entirely that of a shark’s. Unlike the two creatures who are operating the controls, it is unclothed. It’s being kept submerged in the fluid by flat-bottomed prongs that extend from the top of the tank.

1. HAMMOND: They can carry out the entire process themselves now? They don’t need you to supervise them any longer?

CAPTION: On his private island off the coast of California, oil billionaire Hector Hammond receives a briefing from scientist Aaron Goins about the rapid metamorphosis of advanced life forms. 



PAGE TWO
PANEL 1: At the bottom of the panel, in the foreground, the metamorphizing shark is floating in the chamber. At the top of the panel, in the background, Hammond and Goins are sitting in their seats. 

1. GOINS: That’s right. The new mutant will learn the process while it’s being performed on him. They can now produce as many mutants as you can bring them sharks to mutate.

PANEL 2: On Hammond and Goins. Hammond is speaking into a walkie-talkie. 

1. HAMMOND: Mr. Winston, please meet me and Dr. Goins at the front entrance of the theater. 

2. GOINS: All you need to do is feed them

PANEL 3: One of the mutants who is operating the chamber’s controls in the foreground. In the background, Hammond and Goins are climbing the steps, exiting the amphitheater. 

3. HAMMOND: They eat an awful lot of meat though. If you could just mutate them so they’d be happy eating the weeds around here, they’d be perfect. 

4. GOINS: Even you can’t have everything, Mr. Hammond. 

PANEL 4: Closeup of Hammond. 

5. HAMMOND: Don’t be so sure about that. 

PANEL 5: Hammond and Goins are exiting through the theater door. Goins is holding the door open for Hammond.

6. HAMMOND: But besides being low-maintenance, it’s even more important for every employee to be expendable. 

PANEL 6: Outside the theater, it’s night. WINSTON is approaching Hammond and Goins. He’s an armed, uniformed guard. His pistol is drawn. 

7. HAMMOND: A good businessman makes sure he can lose anyone and not get hurt by it. 


PAGE THREE 
PANEL 1: Close enough on Winston that the logo on his shirt is visible. It reads, Hammond Oil Security. He’s pointing his pistol at Goins. 

1. WINSTON: You’re to come with me, sir. 

PANEL 2: Another view of the three men. 

2. GOINS: What are you talking about?

3. HAMMOND: Just go along with him. 

PANEL 3: On Goins, who is upset.

4. GOINS: Is this a joke?

PANEL 4: Favoring the pistol that’s pointed as Goins. 

5. HAMMOND: Don’t make this any more difficult than it needs to be. 

6. GOINS: Are you crazy? You’re going to kill me? 

PANEL 5: Winston is gripping Goins by the shoulder and turning him around. 

7. HAMMOND: You know too much. And you like to talk too much. That’s a bad combination.

PANEL 6: Hammond is in the foreground as Winston herds the distraught Goins away. 

8. GOINS: You’re a fool, Hammond. You don’t know what you’re doing. You’ll regret this. 


PAGE FOUR
PANEL 1: The scene is the lawn of Hammond’s mansion. Hammond is being interviewed by a female TELEVISION REPORTER as a CAMERAMAN tapes the exchange. The reporter is the sort of attractive young woman who has become the norm in today’s television news.

1. REPORTER: We’re at the home of Hector Hammond, the founder of Hammond Oil. He’s planning to put his revolutionary new gasoline, H33, on the market in 23 countries within the next month. But not yet in the United States. Can you explain this unusual rollout process for us, Mr. Hammond?

PANEL 2: From the cameraman’s point of view. The reporter has extended the microphone to Hammond.

2. HAMMOND: We’re rapidly accelerating production and will have H33 on the market in the United States and most other industrialized nations within three years. We’re in talks with several convenience store chains in the United States about their carrying it. But it’s important to me to first give H33’s enormous financial and environmental benefits to the world’s poorest countries. 

PANEL 3. A new view taking in all three of them. The reporter is looking into the camera now. 

3. REPORTER: Mr. Hammond is referring to the fact that H33 is only one-third as expensive as ordinary gasoline, and it emits just one-third the pollutants That’s because of an additive his researchers have developed and named Claritrex. 

PANEL 4: On the reporter and Hammond. She’s now looking at Hammond.

4. REPORTER: What can you tell us about that?

5. HAMMOND: I can tell you that H33 consists of 21 percent refined petroleum and 79 percent Claritrex. We’re producing Claritrex at the same facility where we refine our oil. And unlike oil, Claritrex is made of very common and inexpensive materials. This is a breakthrough discovery that will satisfy the world’s demand for oil far into the future

PANEL 5: HAL JORDAN is watching Hammond’s interview on television. He’s in his bedroom and is buttoning his shirt. The place looks lived-in and relaxed but not sloppy.

6. HAMMOND: I’m proud to have played a role in solving this enormous problem that the world has faced for so long. But I’m equally proud to give its first fruits to those nations that the world has left behind economically. I’m setting an example that all businesses should follow. 

PANEL 6: Another view of the television screen, which excludes Hal.

7. REPORTER: You’ve described the formula for Claritrex as proprietary information. But won’t your competitors be able to analyze it and produce it themselves?


PAGE FIVE
PANEL 1: Hal is sitting at the foot of his bed now and is putting on his shoes.

1. HAMMOND: They can figure out what Claritrex is made of. That won’t be hard to do. But they’ll never figure out our process for making it

PANEL 2: A new view of the interview in progress, taking in Hammond, the reporter and the cameraman.

2. REPORTER: You sound confident about that. But never is a long time. 

3. HAMMOND: Trust me. They’ll never do it. Their only hope is to steal the secret from us somehow. But they’ll all be out of business long before they can accomplish that. And good riddance to them. 

PANEL 3 Hal is standing up and combing his hair, watching the screen.

4. REPORTER: If you really do become the only producer of gasoline and fuel oils, won’t the world’s governments break up your company?

5. HAMMOND: I’ll worry about that when it happens. It’ll be a good problem for Hammond Oil and the world to have to face. 

PANEL 4: From the cameraman’s viewpoint. The reporter is looking toward him.

6. REPORTER: This announcement has stunned the experts in the field and has made Hector Hammond the most talked about businessman in the world. 

PANEL 5: Hal is holding his remote and has turned off his television. 

7. HAL: Ring, can you suggest how Hammond Oil made such a breakthrough in the development of fuel?

8. HAL’S RING: I’d need to get within sensor range of the refinery. Then I might be able to analyze the process. 

PANEL 6: Hal is leaving his house and approaching his car. 

9. HAL (thinking): It sounds like a technology that shouldn’t even exist on Earth. Maybe it happened naturally, but I ought to check it out. 


PAGE SIX
PANEL 1: Hal, CODGE KAMALKU and SNAPPER CARR are eating in the cafeteria of Ferris Racing. They’re sitting in that order, left to right, on one side of a table. Codge is a gray-haired Asian man of about 70 who is wearing a suit. A good model for him would be the late actor James Shigeta. Snapper looks about 18 and is wearing his usual windbreaker. 

1. CODGE: So. That old Stalin-looking Carl Ferris has decided to grace us with his presence today. 

2. HAL: Come on, Codge. The fact that he’s got a mustache doesn’t make him look like Stalin. 

PANEL 2: Some distance away, CARL FERRIS is in the foreground, talking to a few EMPLOYEES. Carl still has dark hair, and a mustache. A good model for him would be the actor William Powell. A logo for Ferris Racing is affixed to one wall. It will need to be designed. 

3. CODGE: He looks like Stalin and he acts like him. And when he talks, he always sounds like he’s about to burp. That gets on my nerves.

4. HAL: He does not. 

PANEL 3: On Hal, Codge and Snapper.

5. SNAPPER: How many years have you been Carl’s purchasing manager, Mr. K?

6. CODGE: For thirty-one years, Snapper. It doesn’t seem like a day over sixty years though. 

PANEL FOUR: Favoring Hal.

7. HAL: I bet Carl thinks you look like Mao Zedong. Maybe that’s why you two are such good pals. 

8. CODGE: Show a little respect to me, Harold. I might become an in-law of yours soon. Look over there. Your sister Sophie is having lunch with Tom. 

PANEL SIX: In the foreground, TOM KAMALKU and SOPHIE JORDAN are eating at a table. Codge, Hal and Snapper’s table is in the background. Sophie is wearing a sun dress. A good model for her would be the late actress Myrna Fahey.

9. HAL: Wow. She sure is.


PAGE SEVEN
PANEL 1: On Tom and Sophie.

1. TOM: Sophie, I can’t read your mind. You need to tell me these things.

2. SOPHIE: I did tell you. You need to pay better attention to what I say.

PANEL 2: A view of Tom and Sophie with Carl talking to the employees in the background.

3. TOM: You always think I’m talking to other women. I never do that.

4. SOPHIE: Go right ahead. It’s none of my business.

PANEL 3: On Hal and Snapper.

5. HAL: I didn’t know anything about this.

6. SNAPPER: That dress she’s wearing is nice. But I bet anything would look good on her.

PANEL 4: Codge snaps the fingers of one hand in Snapper’s face. This surprises Snapper and amuses Hal.

7. CODGE: Put your eyes back in your head, young man.

PANEL 5: On Tom and Sophie, favoring Tom.

8. SOPHIE: I’m so mad at you right now, I can’t see straight.

9. TOM: Everything you’re mad about is something you’ve imagined.

PANEL 6: Closeup of the fuming Sophie.

10. SOPHIE: And now you’re claiming I’m paranoid.


PAGE EIGHT
PANEL 1: On Hal and Snapper.

1. SNAPPER: Tom has good taste in women. 

2. HAL: I agree with you, Snapper.

PANEL 2: On Codge.

3. CODGE: Sophie has good taste in men. 

PANEL 3: On Snapper, who is smiling.

4. SNAPPER: It looks like they’re in their own world. They’re not even noticing anything else.

PANEL 4. On Tom and Sophie.

5. TOM: Just stop this, Sophie, I’ve never said you’re jealous hearted. I’ve never even thought it.

6. SOPHIE: It’s your own ego that makes you think I’d act that way over you.

PANEL 5: Carl Ferris is leaving the cafeteria, and is walking past Hal, Snapper and Codge.

7. HAL: Hi, Carl.

PANEL 6: Favoring Hal and Codge.

8. CODGE: Stop being a company stooge, Hal. 

9. HAL: If you guys have finished your lunch, let’s go over there and talk to them. 


PAGE NINE
PANEL 1: Hal, Codge and Snapper are in the background, approaching Tom and Sophie. 

1. SOPHIE: You’re so full of yourself, Tom.

PANEL 2: Hal, Codge and Snapper are now standing beside Tom and Sophie’s table. 

2. CODGE: So Tom, is this the lady you were telling me is so jealous? That’s cute.

PANEL 3: Sophie, who is grimacing, lifts a saucer that contains a slice of apple pie. 

Silent panel.

PANEL 4. She squishes the saucer and the pie into Tom’s face. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 5. Tom is using a napkin to wipe his face and is looking toward Codge, who is off-panel, as Sophie storms away.

3. TOM: Thanks, Pop. 

PANEL 6: Hal, Snapper and Codge are gazing at Tom in astonishment. 

Silent panel. 


PAGE TEN 

PANEL 1: A long view of Hal and CAROL FERRIS, who are walking through the parking lot of Ferris Racing. Hal is wearing a racing suit and is carrying a helmet.

1. HAL: The car is running fine now. The repairs cost a lot less than I thought they would.

2. CAROL: That’s good. But dad is mad at you about that wreck. 

PANEL 2: A closer view of them. 

3. HAL: He’s mad at me because that fool Buddy Spillane took a turn too wide and hit me?

4. CAROL: He says Buddy swerves wide all the time. He says you should have anticipated that and been able to avoid it. He says you could have won that race. 

PANEL 3: Still closer on them. 

5. HAL: So now I’m responsible for the stupidity of our competitors?

6. CAROL: Dad says the more reckless a competitor is, the more proactive our drivers need to be about it. He says he’s disappointed in you.

PANEL 4: They’re nearing Ferris’s practice track. 

5. HAL: Has Carl’s attitude about me spilled over into his daughter?

6. CAROL: I’m still thinking it over. 

PANEL 5: Tom is about fifty feet away, approaching them. 

7. HAL: While you’re deciding, may I put my arm around you?

8. CAROL: I guess. 

PANEL 6: A rear view of Hal and Carol as Tom joins them. Hal and Carol each have an arm around the other. 

9. TOM: Hi, Carol.


PAGE ELEVEN
PANEL 1: Hal, Carol and Tom are standing beside the open driver’s window of a race car. Hal is putting on his helmet. 

1. HAL: Hector Hammond is a good PR man. He knows how to present himself. But if you look back over his career, there are some signs that he’s quite ruthless. Keep that in mind when you’re talking to him. 

PANEL 2: Hal’s helmet is on now, and he’s turned away from them and is moving toward the car. 

2. TOM: Don’t worry. I won’t sign Ferris Racing over to him. 

3. CAROL: That’s good to know.

PANEL 3: Hal is gripping the car’s roof and has stuck one foot into the driver’s window, and is looking back at them.

4. TOM: I’m just looking forward to seeing his house on that private island. But what will you be doing?

5. HAL: He owns another island. It’s in the Indian Ocean. His refinery is there. I’m going to pay it a visit and see what I can find out. 

PANEL 4: Hal is entering the car through the window. 

6. TOM: Did he invite you there?

7. HAL: I’m paying an unofficial call as a Green Lantern. 

PANEL 5: Hal is inside the car now. 

8. HAL: And Tom, I’m sorry about what happened with Sophie. I’ll talk to her about it. 

9. TOM: Yeah, OK. 

PANEL 6: Carol and Tom watch Hal as he drives away. 

10. CAROL: You didn’t sound enthusiastic about Sophie. 

11. TOM: I like her, but that was a pretty extreme thing she did. 


PAGE TWELVE
PANEL 1: It’s night. Hal, wearing his Green Lantern uniform and flying low over the ocean, is approaching Hammond Oil’s island refinery. A tanker is docked at the facility. 

1. HAL: Ring, burn out enough of the island’s wiring to knock out all the electricity. That includes any generators. 

PANEL 2: A beam is shooting from Hal’s ring toward the refinery, which is closer now.

2. HAL: But make sure not to cause any fires.

PANEL 3: TWO CREWMAN on the deck of the tanker are looking toward the now-darkened refinery. The tanker’s electricity is still on.

3. FIRST CREWMAN: What could have caused that?

4. SECOND CREWMAN: I don’t know. That’s not supposed to happen.

PANEL 4: On the refinery grounds,, A SECURITY GUARD is addressing THREE OTHER GUARDS.

5. FIRST GUARD: This might be trouble. If you see anyone who shouldn’t be here, don’t take any chances with them. That’s why you’re carrying those rifles. To use them.

PANEL 5: Elsewhere on the grounds, TWO EMPLOYEES are conferring. Hal is flying low over the facility in the background, in silhouette.

6. FIRST EMPLOYEE: Check the generator. It should have come on.

PANEL 6: Hal is approaching a chain-link fence with coiled razor wire at the top. A sign on the fence reads, Only Authorized Personnel Allowed Beyond This Point.  Use Of Force Authorized.

Silent panel.


PAGE THIRTEEN
PANEL 1: Deep inside the refinery, Hal has landed on a roof and is peering down over the edge. There’s a roof structure behind Hal.

1. HAL (thinking): What could that be?

PANEL 2: A view over Hal’s shoulder of the grounds below. Four mutant sharks are standing in front of the darkened building.

Silent panel.

PANEL 3: On Hal.

2. HAL: Ring, analyze those creatures as well as the process for making the fuel. 

PANEL 4: A ground level view of a dozen more mutants coming out of the building. There are no humans among them.

Silent panel.

PANEL 5: Hal is walking away from the roof’s edge and into an open area, looking at his ring.

3. HAL’S RING: This is a lot of information to process. It might take me a while.

PANEL 6: One of the mutant sharks is emerging from around the corner of the roof structure and is approaching Hal from behind. 

Silent panel. 


PAGE FOURTEEN

PANEL 1: Tom and Hector Hammond are climbing a staircase in the grand foyer of Hammond’s mansion. 

1. HAMMOND: By the way, you look young to be the chief engineer at Ferris Racing. 

2. TOM: I’m 25. Just out of grad school. But I’ve been working at Ferris since I was 16. 

PANEL 2: They’ve reached a door at the top, which Hammond is holding open for Tom. 

3. HAMMOND: That’s impressive. You know my company is a lot bigger than Ferris. Maybe you’ll think about coming to work for me, if you ever get bored there. I have some very interesting things going on that would keep you busy. 

4. TOM: I’m sure you do. 

PANEL 3: Tom and Hammond are walking through the doorway and out onto a mezzanine. It surrounds a large plaza below that has many plants, two fountains and a shallow pool. 

5. TOM: It looks like you’re living the American dream, Mr. Hammond.

6. HAMMOND: That dream is alive and well, sir. I assure you it is.

PANEL 4: The view is from the plaza floor. The pool is about a foot deep and contains large goldfish. 

7. TOM: I was thinking about putting your logo on our cars. But if Carl Ferris and our drivers are as impressed by your fuel as those reporters were, maybe they’d do some testimonials. 

PANEL 5: On Tom and Hammond. 

8. HAMMOND: That sounds great to me. 

9. TOM: I’m wondering how you made such a breakthrough in fuel technology. It seems incredible. 

PANEL 6: The view is from the ground floor. An armed guard, MARTIN, is entering the ground floor, leading one of the mutant sharks into the plaza. Tom and Hammond haven’t yet noticed Martin and the mutant. 

10. HAMMOND: It was mostly a matter of my being willing to try things that haven’t been tried. 


PAGE FIFTEEN 

PANEL 1: On Hammond. 

1. HAMMOND: The fact that Hammond Oil is one of the smallest companies in the industry has made us hungrier than the big boys. And because I own the whole thing, I don’t have to get anyone’s permission to try some unusual approaches. 

PANEL 2: On Tom. 

2. TOM: But a technical leap like that is amazing. You must have some very smart people working for you.

3. HAMMOND: I’m not afraid of intelligence in my employees. In fact I demand it. That’s why I said you might be a good fit for us. 

PANEL 3: Taking in Tom, Hammond, Martin and the mutant. Tom has noticed Martin and the mutant below. and is gazing with astonishment at them. 

3. TOM: What is that?

PANEL 4: Tom has moved to the rail and is gripping it, looking down at Martin and the mutant. 

4. TOM: That thing is real, isn’t it?

PANEL 5: A view from below. Martin is looking up with surprise at Tom and Hammond. 

5. HAMMOND: I’ve told you to never bring them in here, Martin. 

PANEL 6: On Hammond. 

6. HAMMOND: I wish you hadn’t seen that, Mr. Kamalku. 


PAGE SIXTEEN
PANEL 1: On Hal, who is still on the roof of the building in the refinery.

1. HAL’S RING: This technology appears to be based entirely on current Earth science, yet produced by intellects much greater than any that should exist on Earth. 

PANEL 2: On Hal’s upper body. His ring is out of view. 

2. HAL: So it probably didn’t come from another world or from the future. Could those things that look like sharks be that intelligent?

3. HAL’S RING (off-panel): I’ll be unable to speculate until I complete my analysis of them. That might take a while. 

PANEL 3: The mutant shark is right behind Hal now. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 4: On Hal’s face, excluding the creature.

4. HAL (thinking): Hector Hammond isn’t a scientist. He’s a businessman. 

PANEL 5: The creature lashes out, striking Hal in the side. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 6: Hal has been hurled away by the blow. He’s on his hands and knees, and is firing a beam from his ring that’s hitting the creature. 

Silent panel. 


PAGE SEVENTEEN
PANEL 1. Another view, as Hal is now on his knees, and the creature is lying prone before him. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 2: Hal is standing now, but is bent over with his hands grasping his thighs, wincing. 

1. HAL: Ring, I think I might have a cracked rib. 

PANEL 3 On Hal’s ring. 

2. HAL’S RING: You’ve suffered two broken ribs that are potentially dangerous. You need immediate medical attention. I’m still analyzing these organisms. 

PANEL 4: A view from below that favors the prone mutant. Hal is standing straighter now, with an arm bent and pressed against his side. 

3. HAL: Pull it with a tractor beam. 

PANEL 5: Hal is flying away as his ring pulls the mutant behind him. 

4. HAL: How strong is that thing?

5. HAL’S RING: It could have killed you if it had wanted to. But you need to hurry to a hospital. 

PANEL 6: Unseen by Hal, one of the mutant sharks is standing on the roof, watching him fly away with the other creature. 

Silent panel. 


PAGE EIGHTEEN
PANEL 1: Martin is in the foreground, climbing some steps up the mezzanine. Tom and Hammond are in the background. 

1. TOM: You’re refusing to let me leave? Are you crazy? How are you going to stop me? Everybody knows I came here. 

PANEL 2: On Tom and Hammond. Tom is getting out his cell phone. 

2. HAMMOND: There’s no WiFi here. But I’m sure we can come to a financial arrangement you’d be happy with, in return for your keeping confidential some proprietary information that you shouldn’t have learned in the first place. 

PANEL 3: Favoring Tom. 

3. TOM: I don’t have a problem with keeping your business a secret, Mr. Hammond. I’d do that for free. But I don’t like the threatening tone you were using. You’re probably doing something illegal here. Or at least unethical enough that it could get you into trouble. 

PANEL 4: Martin has now reached Hammond and Tom. 

4. MARTIN: I’m sorry, Mr. Hammond. 

5. HAMMOND: Nothing improper is going on here, Mr. Kamalku. But none of my employees will take you back, until I feel sure you’ll respect my privacy. 

PANEL 5: Tom is walking away. 

6. TOM: I know how to operate a boat. Or I’ll take one of your rowboats if I need to. 

7. HAMMOND: That’s a long way to row, Mr. Kamalku. 

PANEL 6: Tom is some distance away from Hammond and Martin now. 

8. HAMMOND: Stop him. 


PAGE NINETEEN
PANEL 1: Hammond is now on the ground floor, leading the mutant toward the door that Martin had been approaching with it. A LOUD REPORT has rung out, and Hammond is looking back in the direction in which Tom and Hammond went. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 2: Hammond is opening a door and exiting the building onto a patio, where Martin is standing over Tom’s supine form. Martin has shot Tom in the chest. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 3: Hammond is now beside Martin and is looking down at Tom. 

1. HAMMOND: You idiot. I didn’t tell you to kill him. 

PANEL 4: Hammond snatches the pistol away from Martin. 

Silent panel. 

PANEL 5: On Martin’s face. 

2. MARTIN: No. 

PANEL 6: Hammond fires the pistol toward the Martin, who is off panel. 

Silent panel. 


PAGE TWENTY
SPLASH: TWO MORE SECURITY GUARDS are running up. Hammond is holding the pistol and looking down at the prone forms of Tom and Martin. A small rivulet of blood is running out across the concrete from each man.

Silent panel. 

CAPTION: To be continued...